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“Another Long Night…”

Written by

Dominick Yambao

FADE IN:

EXT. CITY – NIGHT

Establishing shot

INT. /EXT. COURIER’S CAR – NIGHT

DETECTIVE

This city is full of all

kinds of people: good,

bad, mostly the latter.

COURIER gets in the car carrying a briefcase, tosses it on the passenger seat

DETECTIVE

(CONT’D)

I never knew him, he might’ve

been okay. Goes to Church, decent

job, maybe had some family to.

COURIER puts on gloves

DETECTIVE

(CONT’D)

But that doesn’t make him

perfect. Just when you think

you’ve met an average nobody

COURIER checks his mirror

DETECTIVE

(CONT’D)

You’re actually looking

At a monster who wants

to play ‘dress-up’.

COURIER looks at mirror

DETECTIVE

(CONT’D)

Pretending what they really are is a joke.

COURIER turns car keys, turns to briefcase

NARRATOR

(CONT’D)

But who am I to judge? My

job doesn’t make me a saint.

COURIER looks at window, breathes heavy sigh

DETECTIVE

(CONT’D)

I’ve investigated all sorts of

cases, I just didn’t expect this

one to be biggest.

COURIER drives off

Detective

(CONT’D)

In for a penny, in for a pound.

EXT. BRISTOL - NIGHT

DETECTIVE

(CONT’D)

It all started over a week ago, an

Anonymous caller wanted to meet me

Privately in a discreet location.

DETECTIVE walks toward location

DETECTIVE

(CONT’D)

It could’ve been a prank or trap,

but I had a gut-feeling that it

was the honest truth, so stupid.

CLIENT approaches DETECTIVE

CLIENT

Were you followed?

DETECTIVE turns to CLIENT

DETECTIVE

Can’t say I know for sure.

So… what do you need?

CLIENT gives DETECTIVE photo of COURIER, DETECTIVE analyses photo

CLIENT

An old friend of mine is missing.

DETECTIVE takes out note pad and pen, begins writing.

DETECTIVE

Where did you last see him?

CLIENT

My house, kicked out

Of his flat, over due rent.

DETECTIVE

How long has he been gone?

CLIENT

Three days.

DETECTIVE

Any idea where he might be?

CLIENT looks down guiltily.

EXT. BRISTOL – NIGHT

COURIER walks through alley

CLIENT

No, he always leaves at

Night and comes back in

The middle of the day.

COURIER is looking around, making sure no one followed him

CLIENT

(CONT’D)

And he always carries a black

suitcase whenever he goes out.

HITMAN sitting back against a wall, COURIER doesn’t notice him

DETECTIVE

Does he have a night job?

HITMAN puts on coat and hat as he rises from ground

CLIENT

He hasn’t been employed for

Years, but there are rumours

Going around that he’s been

HITMAN walks to COURIER, doesn’t notice HITMAN

CLIENT

(CONT’D)

In and out of places

Around the city.

EXT. BRISTOL – NIGHT

DETECTIVE continues writing notes

DETECTIVE

What kind of places?

CLIENT

Shops, factories, hotels,

you name it, but he always

mentioned THE GOLDEN JACKAL

DETECTIVE

The pub, been there once

Didn’t like their chips

Alright, if you have

Anything else, give me a call…

HITMAN aims gun at COURIER, cocks gun; COURIER turns around in shock

DETECTIVE

(CONT’D)

Don’t worry, I’m on the case.

BANG

Prototype Script/ First Draft

“Another Long Night…”

Written by

Dominick Yambao

FADE IN:

EXT. CITY – NIGHT

Establishing shot

INT. /EXT. COURIER’S CAR – NIGHT

DETECTIVE

Shots were fired, some kid left

For dead like a baby in a bin;

Out of sight out of mind.

COURIER gets in the car carrying a briefcase, tosses it on the passenger seat

DETECTIVE

(CONT’D)

I never knew the guy, he might’ve

been okay. Goes to Church, has a

job, maybe even loved his family.

COURIER puts on gloves

DETECTIVE

(CONT’D)

Probably met a mugger on the way

home, or a run-in with THE ARTIST

COURIER checks his mirror

DETECTIVE

(CONT’D)

But here’s how I see it: your

wallet isn’t empty, and some

psycho didn’t carve you up.

COURIER smiles at mirror

DETECTIVE

(CONT’D)

But your ID is gone.

COURIER turns car keys, turns to briefcase

NARRATOR

(CONT’D)

Somebody killed you in this

Rotting city for a reason…

COURIER adjusts wire, looks at window, breathes heavy sigh

DETECTIVE

(CONT’D)

…and I’m not gonna let some

tosser get away with this.

COURIER drives off

EXT. BRISTOL – NIGHT

DETECTIVE

(CONT’D)

Nothing in the papers and no word

From the boys in blue, they’re

‘Playing dumb’ over a dead teen.

DETECTIVE walks toward AUGUSTINE

DETECTIVE

(CONT’D)

Maybe THE GOSSIP knows something?

DETECTIVE

AUGUSTINE…

AUGUSTINE turns to the DETECTIVE, gasps

DETECTIVE

…Or do you prefer

GUS THE GOSSIP?

AUGUSTINE draws her gun. DETECTIVE raises his hands slightly

AUGUSTINE

BACK OFF, I DIDN”T

DO ANYTHING!

DETECTIVE

Well we both know

That’s a lie.

AUGUSTINE releases the safety

DETECTIVE

Relax. I’m the one who called.

AUGUSTINE lowers her gun hesitantly, extends left arm

AUGUSTINE

Well cough it up then.

DETECTIVE reaches into his pocket, and calmly hands some money to AUGUSTINE; she puts her gun away and counts the cash.

DETECTIVE

I’m told you can be a very…

reliable source of information.

AUGUSTINE

Well you heard right. But

What is it that the town

Nutter doesn’t know already.

EXT. ALLEY – NIGHT

COURIER walks into alley

DETECTIVE

CCTV shows that the victim

Was last seen in NELSON ST

HITMAN follows soon after

DETECTIVE

20km away from the scene of

the crime, he was being followed.

HITMAN draws syringe, he injects the COURIER and covers his screams. The COURIER stumbles. The HITMAN raises his pistol, and fires.

DETECTIVE

There was a struggle,

But ended shortly after

The assailant shot him.

COURIER dying on the floor, the HITMAN proceeds to take the briefcase

EXT. BRISTOL – NIGHT

DETECTIVE

I arrived soon afterwards,

But the coppers kicked me

Out before I was finished.

AUGUSTINE

And you need my help because…

DETECTIVE

You and I know the bullets didn’t

kill him, the perpetrator made

it appear like a messy ID theft.

AUGUSTINE shows signs of worry on her face and looks down, leans on wall/rail.

DETECTIVE

He may have been

Carrying a package

 AUGUSTINE

(Sigh) His name is – was

ALAN, he’s an errand boy

 One of many… for THE APE

DETECTIVE

That brute hires kids

to get his mail now?

AUGUSTINE

He uses kids to transfer his

products to his ‘businesses’

normally during the day.

DETECTIVE

Why was ALAN out late?

AUGUSTINE motions the DETECTIVE to get closer.

AUGUSTINE

ALAN was supposed to deliver

a secret package from THE APE.

The steady balance the underworld

Has been building up for years is cracking

DETECTIVE

And it all depends upon a case.